vox nihili

ERm... I could go through the whole thing and pick it apart for the inevitable impossibly small nitpicky things that happen in every poem, but instead I'll say this: what ...

Wow. is all i can say. very good poem. you utilize words so that you grip areader and make 'em care 'bout 'dis birdie. very well written. you have an ...

:? Number one: if this is by edgar garcia, then this needed to be posted under the 'other' forum. You post things that YOU have written in the fiction/nonfiction/poetry forums. ...

A word on my opinion of the rating: it should be pg-13. And let people know what kind of a read they are in for. I didn't realize that it ...

I have to say, I second Squall's words. I love the simmilies, and couldn't bring myself to really be nit-picky on the first readings because of the wonderful ring this ...

I wrote a poem called 'A Monster, A Fiend,;' which I almost titled the same thing as this. Weird? ;) Anyway, I also wondered if you were talking about OCD... ...

Very good. It's a delightful poem, very uplifting. Here's one tip: it wants punctuation. Try a few commas, semicolons, anything. You have good taste as to where the full stops ...

Bravo! You just explained to an idiot who has never, ever read whatever it is you are talking about what a twisted wretch this Iago person is. Never read it, ...

Woow. I was kind of confused in the middle, but at the end, wow. Such a bang. You really have a knack for the tear-drop type of tragic irony. Please, ...

I couldn't find anything at all wrong with the first stanza-it was immaculate! But the rest--eh, there were a few little fussy things. Here it is with the changes I'd ...

Since others have said everything else including what I'm about to say, I guess I'm just backing up their statements, but... I loved it. The whole suspense, the sort of ...

wow! I so totally get it, the story. tip: insert apostrophes into all contractions. That would be about all I can fish up on technical stuff. language tip: find a ...

I was going to try and find something very finicky to pick at, but msomeye beat me to it. I'll instead say this: It could stand alone easily, because I ...

I must admit, I didn't read the entire thing due to lack of time...*looks again at clock on computer, realizes must now go to bed* But what I did read, ...

Erm..disturbing. I'm not a big fan of suicide poems, although I've only read a few. This one is definitely heart-wrenching, and that's a good sort of poetic quality I envy ...